For Research Proposal – Sadia Aslam

Reviewer: Jana Mettwali
Author: Sadia Aslam

Glow (What worked well):

Sadia selected an extremely interesting and compelling topic of interest right from the start. The proposal is concise, pertinent, and unifies neuroscience, psychology, and criminal justice in an obvious and interesting manner. Sadia’s description of structures in the brain such as the prefrontal cortex and amygdala demonstrates a clear understanding of scientific terms. The relationship between behavior and biology is discussed in accessible and intelligent terms. Sadia’s interest in why certain individuals do not become violent even with comparable qualities makes her proposal richer.

Grow (What could be improved): The suggestion can be improved by extending slightly on how specifically she will be utilizing the sources in the Literature Review—are each of them discussing a separate function of the brain, or specific case studies? A more direct thesis statement at the conclusion would also assist in guiding the organization of the ensuing paper. One or two transition words between paragraphs would also make the transition itself smoother.

I will have it focus on serial killers who are primarily of African descent. Will it be discussing real-world cases or merely the science behind it? How do you reconcile the science with the social and environmental aspects?

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